Monday, July 03, 2006

Suby's challenge, day 1: My bike by a rice field

My bike by a rice field

Well, it's day 1 of Suby's challenge. For those of you who don't know, my mentor and harshest critic--and a good mentor must be a harsh critig to be a good mentor--issued a challenge. He told me to look at the archives of www.alakija.shutterchance.com and try and find five pictures from my archives that recreate or capture a similar themed image.

For my first shot, I decided to take Azhar's favourite pic and put it up here. The theme I was trying to recreate is captured in this shot. What do you think?

8 Comments:

At 3:10 PM, Anonymous Suby said...

My comments are on it's way bro. Going to be a very busy day for the Susbter, meetings all day :)

Suby

 
At 11:37 PM, Anonymous Suby said...

Waiting for otheres to comments before I do :)

So still watching and waiting :)
Suby

 
At 12:26 AM, Blogger Azhar said...

As I said before, by far one of your best shots with a simple composition following rules of thridsy that I like. The houses in the back mudging up with the bike mirror distracts but not much.It looks like you sharpened in Picasa, I think undo that the lines are too harsh.
Overall for you , I really like it, now I would reccomend as a side project try and process this one in Photoshop maybe and see what you get by toning, but I think this version will be better because of the vivid colours. Again, your best here, hope I see more of this.

 
At 12:28 AM, Blogger Azhar said...

May I add a little bit more lol,
If you're trying to recreate Jide's shot, 1. Try actually capturing a similar scene when possible (It helps you figure out how he did it : its also physical practice instead of mental learning it will stay with you), 2. Get inspiration by how you can use lights, flash, angles, compositions to your advantage, and 3. Whenever he lists post processing : do it and try.

 
At 7:46 AM, Anonymous tore said...

For me, this is a successful capture. I like the composition a lot and the angles are great. I know what Azhar means about the oversharpening but the same shot in a bigger size in your Flickr collection looks better so maybe that has something to do with it's posting here, rather than processing.
Also, the colours are great but it's a bit oversaturated for me. The green looks unnatural. But, hey, what do I know?

 
At 8:54 AM, Blogger micki said...

Hey! I recognize that helmet!!

I am interested in hearing what Suby wants from you exactly. Does he want you to create a duplicate in composition, lens choice...wide, normal, telephoto, lighting, etc. or what? The similarity I see between both images is that there is a bike and each shows us the area in which you both live. I do like your image a lot. I need to know what exactly the ground rules are, though. If not, I'll only comment on your photo as is.

 
At 9:02 AM, Anonymous Suby said...

Now this is a very good attempt, As Azhar says, rule of 3rds used well and I bet you thought bout the framing of the shot and what you wanted to CAPTURE WHEN TAKING THIS. THE BACKGROUND WORKS FOR THIS SHOT, now lets go by the fact you probably do not have photoshop so editing may have been done in picasa.

How many times did you click on that sharpen button? :) Seems a bit too sharp or should I say, I love the sharpness of the bike but with the sharpened background a little too distracting.

A flaw I find with this shot is your initial capture. I would not have incorporated the grass by the road on the left hand side of the shot image into the capture. Unfortunately this cannot be cropped or clonned as this will give us a tottally different shot.

So think before you snap, does that foreground or background add or substract from my shot?

For me this shot is a very good place to start. Looking forward to your next post :)

Suby

 
At 2:07 PM, Blogger Timmybomb said...

Okay Champ, I'm going to carve you Suby style. I hope that's okay with you, but if not just tell me to shut up and leave.

I think you're composition is flawed in two ways. The rule of thirds is well applied, but I don't think you gave enough thought to the foreground. The gravel in the left corner isn't adding anything to the image, it simply distracts.

My main complaint, however, is to do with the background. Let's start with the sky. If the sky is that grey and bland, consider excluding it from your composition. It will more than likely end up looking all white anyway (due to overexposure), so you should probably avoid it if you can. Also, those houses in the background are directly behind your subject, causing a major distraction. Try this again, but take out the horizon, leaving a more basic (and evenly exposed) background.

I should end by saying that I think it's awesome that you are taking this challenge. If you want to improve, this seems like a fantastic way to do it. You are very brave to put yourself out there for all of us to criticise. My first criticism killed me inside, but it made me better. Now I crave criticism.

Anyway, keep it up. Your improving lots already. Just remember, the more you improve, the more people expect from you! Cheers.

 

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